2 Nisan 2012 Pazartesi
Essay
PHSICAL EDUCATION CLASS Have you ever thought about whether phsical education class is necessary or not necessary?Phsical education class is lesson which obtain doing sport students.Phsical education class is very important for healthy life.Some people and students think that phsical education class is not necessary, but I believe phsical education class is necessary because of crucial reasons. Firstly, doing sport is prevent children's get fat.Therefore, we should inoculate children small ages.This also possible with phsical education class.If we can inoculate doing sport our children, future generation will be healtier.So, I think about whether phsical education class is necessary. The second reason is phsical education teachers remain without work.There are lots of phsical education teachers without work in our country.If this class get up, without work teacher scale will increase.According to researches, some students do not want to get up this class for their teachers.As for some students want to increase class hours.Some students says ''We want to phsical education class.'' I think, this opinion also should consider important. The third and most important reason is doing stress some states.For example, these states could be exams, boring class, pass the class, problems with family and friends etc. Students should not do stress for can be busy fight their problems.This also possible with doing sport. To sum up, doing sport very important for people.Therefore, phsical education class should not get up.Phsical education class is very important for do not get fat, teachers's do not remain without work, and students's not doing stress.
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your introduction paragraph is well constructed.
YanıtlaSilyour thesis statement is successful.
doing sport prevents children's getting fat.
we should instill children the idea of doing sport at little ages.
your first body is about preventing them getting fatter, but you didnt talk about anything about this in your paragraph. you talk about doing sport, but what is the relation between sport and getting fat?y of physical education classes.
your second reason is ok, but I think there could be better reasons for the necessit
your third topic sentence could be better. physical education claseses help students get away stress they experience during daily life. and you can give better explanations and examples.
you also have some problems with vocabulary.
get up?? does this phrasel verb mean what you mean??
get up in the morning? or get up physical education class????
ı think you should pay attention to your content of body paragraphs, the tell not the same things with your topic sentence.
I think your essay is good bu you explain a lot of knowledge.
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